Stopped and started this poem
A hundred times
Nothing felt right, not even the rhymes
Is it the perfectionist or the expressionist?
I donโt believe in right or wrong
I just sing my internal song
The tuneโs a little off today
And thatโs totally ok
Not exactly a twist or a turn
Itโs a deep intrinsic churn
A little burn
But this is a journey for you to learn
When I face it
It floats away
And I can return to my rhythmic sway
Youโre looking for something, not an escape, but, loveโs landscape
The pillows of comfortable clouds
The thoughts that come in enjoyable crowds
That indescribable rush creating this harmonious sound
But yet, why are you stuck on the ground?
The foundation is sturdy and stable
Letting me feel ready and able
Even though itโs all just a label
You know in your bones, itโs time to jump off your foundationโs table
Only when I jump
Can I feel gravityโs thump
Through courage and tenacity
You know you can touch the sky, and feel loveโs vivacity
Ace

49 responses to “the secret voice”
The first two stanzas were pretty amazing! This was perfectly written and the lines in italic are beautiful!!
‘This was a journey to learn’ – wonderful! I loved reading this!!
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‘But this is a journey for you to learn’ (correction)
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Thank you so much, Alina!! Aww Iโm glad you noticed the italic lines…theyโre the โsecret voiceโ ๐. Youโre the best, I always appreciate your so kind, thoughtful and loving comments/support – means the world to me!!!!! Hugs and love, dear friend ๐ค๐ค
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Of course. Ohhh ๐ Awww ๐ค๐ค
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That’s so enjoyable–the comfortable cloud, the crowding thought, the jumpy courage– the internal song of love. I love it.
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Aww thank you so much!! Youโre so kind, I am deeply grateful for your kind words and support – means a lot, friend!!! Much love ๐คโจ
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Comfortable words
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Thank you so much, Mina!!! ๐ค
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Welcome Ace
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Ace, each of your poems are like magical and when I read them I just go in a different world. How are you so amazing? Thanks for being so magical
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Awww Riya, youโre the best!!! You make my day and the smile on my face will never come off!!!! I appreciate you so much, sis!!!! Thanks for always being there and for being awesome!!!!! Your support means the world to me!!! Hugs and love, dear friend ๐ค๐ค๐ค
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Beautiful lines, Ace. Rhyming made the poem even more beautiful. Great work. Congrats!!
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Thank you so much, KK!! You always leave such kind and thoughtful comments, means more than words can say!!! Iโm so glad we connected, and your support since the beginning always makes my heart warm!! Much love, dear friend ๐ค๐ค
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You’re always welcome, my friend ๐
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Whoaaaa!!!!That was awesome!! It was like a poem, song, and painting mix. The rhythm was perfection, the words flowed effortlessly, and I could visualize it all as I read. Excellent Ace! You are truly one of a kind!โค๏ธ
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Aww thank you so much, Grace!! That means a lot coming from one of my favorite poets!!! Youโre so kind! I appreciate you, dear friend!!! And Iโm so touched by all the love and support you show me – means more than words can say!!! Hugs and love ๐ค๐ค
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My pleasue.โค๏ธ๐คโค๏ธ
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Youโre looking for something, not an escape, but, loveโs landscape – such beautiful truth in this!!
I like how your poem conveys a solid strength and a fluid rhythm all weaved in one beautiful flow – it is something not understood by the mind but felt and known in the heart-mind.
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Aww thank you so much!!! Thatโs my favorite line too!!! Youโre always so kind and thoughtful, I appreciate you so much!!! Aww that is wonderfully said and Iโm so glad you feel that way about my work, youโre the best!!!! Your support means more than words can ever say, thanks for always being there!! ๐ค๐ค
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Keep singing sister, loud and clear for all 5he world to hear! Your song is a Melody that my soul recognizes and harmonizes along with as we rise in the light and love of it all ๐๐ ๐๐๐
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Awwwww sis, thank you so much!!! Your love, encouragement and support always makes my day and my heart warm! Youโre amazing, your song deeply resonates with mine too and I love hearing us sing together!!! Grateful for you, much love ๐ค๐ค๐ซ
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Oh Ace this has to be one of my favourites, it’s so well written and close to heart. The imagery is so beautiful and the italics just bring it to a whole new level! Much love โค โค
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Aww that means a lot coming from one of my favorite writers!!!! Thank you so much, Cait!!! I appreciate you!!! And am always touched by your overflowing/continuous support, truly means more than words can say!!!!! Much love and big hugs ๐ค๐ค
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All is well. What came out was just right ๐
Happy Easter ๐ฃ
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Aww thank you, Ashok!! I appreciate that, youโre always so kind and thoughtful with your comments!! Grateful for you, dear friend ๐ค๐ค
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Very beautiful as always, Ace. Somedays we gotta just go with the flow, isn’t it๐๐๐. Gracefully written!! Stay blessed and have a beautiful day ahead dear. โค๏ธโค๏ธ๐๐น๐๐๐
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Aww thank you, Diana!! And yes indeed!! I appreciate you, dear friend!!! Your loving support and kind comments always make my day!!! Youโre awesome!! Hugs and love ๐ค๐ค
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Wow, this is incredibly beautiful! I love the whole thing, but the first stanza especially resonates with me. “You don’t have to be perfect to be amazing,” and I think the same applies to poetry. Amazing ๐๐
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Aww thank you so much, Wardah!! Exactly, I completely agree with you! Your support means the world to me, Iโm always so touched!!! Grateful for you, dear friend!! WP and I are so lucky to have you ๐ค๐ค๐ซ
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Aww ๐ฅบ Thank you so much, Ace. I’m really really blessed to have met you. And you are so welcome! Keep up the amazing work โคโค
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I really love the last three paras and the imagery of this poem! Keep shining, palโค๏ธ
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Aww thank you so much, Aarushi!! Your support means a lot to me!!! Appreciate you, pal ๐ค๐ค
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You too โค๏ธ
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Woah… this was really really cool to see and read… I love the style… third and fourth stanzas touch the soul for me… and all of it is just beautiful. ๐๐๐
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Aww thank you so much, Lia!!! Iโm so glad to hear that! Youโre so always so kind, loving and thoughtful!!! Iโm deeply touched by all the support youโve shown me!!! Appreciate you and our connection, dear friend!! ๐ค๐ค
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Ace, I canโt describe how amazing and fabulous this is. Itโs just so beautifully poignant and Iโve been reading it over and over. Seriously in love with your work, buddy๐ฅบ๐ค๐
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Awwwwww you are so kind!!!! Thank you so much!!! This comment, connecting with you and your sweet support means the absolute world to me, Iโm so truly touched!!!! Appreciate you, dear friend ๐ค๐ค๐ค.
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The pleasureโs truly mine, ace!!๐ค๐ค๐๐๐
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This is strong and right up my street ๐๐พ๐๐พ๐๐พ
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Aww thanks, man!! I really appreciate that and your support always means a lot to me!!! Grateful for your, friend ๐ค๐๐ป๐๐ป
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Always ๐ค
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Such a wonderful opening stanza. Sets the stage for the rest beautifully!
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Thank you so much, Benjamin!!! Youโre awesome, friend!! Words canโt express how much your support, connection and encouraging words mean to me!! Stay fearless, love and light ๐ซ๐ค
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Welcome! I always gain something when I come here. And it’s important to lift each other up. Connections are everything. Many blessings to you!
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Aww Iโm glad to hear that!!! Right again, my friend…connections are everything!!! Hereโs to continuing to lift each other up!! Appreciate you ๐ค๐ค๐ค
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“Through courage and tenacity
You know you can touch the sky,..”
Ahh, I love those two lines so much! They feel right at home in this incredible and raw poem ๐ค๐
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Awww thank you so much, D!! Youโre always so kind and thoughtful, I really canโt express how much you and your support mean to me!!! Iโm so deeply touched!!! Youโre amazing, love and light ๐ซ๐ค
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